Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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daily life is a superb thing.
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believe that we should try to be a group and cooperate with us more, rather than
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, because the comparison and
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making the heroes . But, does the
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subject. The first team
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the
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make
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a lot of enmity between the
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are a lot of students, workers and
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normal
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when
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they know they will compete
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another individual
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other individuals
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companies
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and
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other
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school, they will create and
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most of
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energy.
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as , 50%
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have a different energy when they compete and
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approximately 70%
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effective
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. The other team
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and
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that they should
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cooperate more than the
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, and cancel the
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from the
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reason,
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the
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very angry,
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winner
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winners
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loser
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losers
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, the friends probably compete between themself and
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hate themself.
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, more than 1 million friends
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haters after the
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is fine , and
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make
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the clever
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, it's necessary.

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You try to discuss both sides.
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You state your own view at the end.

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