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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts show data about
computer
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ownership
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, with a
further
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 classification by level of
education
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, from 2002 to 2010. A steady but significant rise can be seen in the percentage of the population that owned a
computer
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 over the period. Just over half the population owned computers in 2002,
whereas
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 by
2010
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2010,
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 three out of four people had a home
computer
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. An analysis of the data by level of
education
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 shows that higher levels of
education
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 correspond to higher levels of
computer
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ownership
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 in both of those years. In 2002, only around 15% of those who did not finish high school had a
computer
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but
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, but
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this
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 figure had
trebled
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tripled
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 by 2010. There were
also
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 considerable increases, of approximately 30 percentage points, for those with a high school diploma or an unfinished college
education
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 (reaching 65% and 85% respectively in 2010).
However
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, graduates and postgraduates proved to have the greatest level of
ownership
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 in 2010, at 90% and 95% respectively, 20 percentage points higher than in 2002. The
last
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 decade has seen a substantial growth in
computer
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ownership
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 in general
,
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apply
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 and across all educational levels.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, ownership, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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