Essay topics: Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Bad
situations
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are
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inevitable
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world
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everyone will have
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and downs
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problems
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job
satesfaction
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satisfaction
or
obstacle
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obstacles
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with money.
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However
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the situation does not improve without any changes, where
self-descipline
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self-discipline
is a major indicator. In my
view
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view,
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I
completly
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completely
agree with the
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statement
that
individual
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individuals
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should try to improve in difficult
situations
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essay
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essay,
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i
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I
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will discuss both views
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, acceptence
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acceptence
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acceptance
, improvement and give my own opinion
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this
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situations
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situation
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. First and foremost, not
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everyone
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has the possibility to change their
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life
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.
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, some people are born in a very poor country like India, where they work in a
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factory
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with a small amount of money, which has no correlation to the certificate
what
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apply
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the
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they
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get from
the
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apply
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school.
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hilights
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highlights
that in some
situations
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there are no possibilities to change their life, because the country where you live
in
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apply
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is corrupt and does not allow self-improvement.
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, life will never be the same, it will change when you have the right
mentallity
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mentality
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, in China, a man called Selling Ching
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started as
toilet
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a toilet
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cleaner with very bad
eviroment
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environment
and now he
owned
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owns
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a multi-million
business
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dollar business
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in AI.
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illustrates that
every one
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everyone
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with the right mentality, consistency
have
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has
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a chance to
breakthrough
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break through
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the problems and become a successful man. All in all,
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it is undeniable that a person will face conflicts, in my
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opinion,
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every tough
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situations
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situation
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can be solved, not only with motivation, but
also
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with
consitency
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consistency
and self-belief. For these reasons, I highly agree with the point that
every one
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everyone
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has a chance to improve
theirselve
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themselves
, because without
trying
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trying,
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you never know.

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task
Your view is clear but the ideas are not strong enough. Add more clear steps to support your view.
coherence
Link ideas with simple join words. Use words like for example, also, but, so to show how ideas go together.
content
You state your own view clearly.
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There is an effort to give examples when you talk about different places.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emotional stability
  • reduce stress
  • anxiety associated with change
  • sense of gratitude
  • contentment
  • mental health
  • stagnation
  • personal growth
  • missed opportunities
  • regrets
  • resilience
  • determination
  • personal development
  • self-esteem
  • circumstances
  • emotionally and physically draining
  • dissatisfaction
  • perpetual sense of inadequacy
  • immediate emotional relief
  • actively seeking
  • long-term fulfillment
  • finding a balance
  • overall well-being
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