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Band 3.5

Some people say that the main environmental issue of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that the disappearance of particular
species
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 of
plants
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 and
animals
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 is the most important environmental problem of
this
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 era,
while
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 others suggest that some environmental issues are more prior. I firmly agree that preserving
biodiversity
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species
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is
the
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a
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 vital problem
of
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for
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environment
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the environment
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. On the one hand, maintaining
the
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apply
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biodiversity
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 is a moderate approach to make a stable
food
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 chain. Every plant and animal
play
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plays
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 a key role in
whole
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the whole
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 ecosystem. The extinction of
plants
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 or
animals
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 potentially contributed to
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the economical
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economical
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economic
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 impact.
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, crops are economical products
,
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apply
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those are
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that
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 not only
affecting
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affect
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 the
food
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 industry
,
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apply
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 but
also
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influencing
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influence
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the
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human
beings
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beings'
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food
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resource
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resources
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.
In addition
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,
plants
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 are the resources which supply
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oxygen
for
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to
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whole
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the whole
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 world. The issue of
Green
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greenhouse
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 gas will become more and more severe if we lose those
plants
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.
Therefore
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, I believe that the disappearance of
plants
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 or
animals
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 is
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a prioritized
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prioritized
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prioritised
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 environmental issue.
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, climate change fosters
the
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extreme weather and natural
disaster
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disasters
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,
such
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 as floods, droughts or wildfires,
while
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 water pollution and air pollution exist in our lives.
However
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, a variety of situations are interconnected to protecting
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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. Despite other issues
are
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being
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 crucial,
the
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biodiversity
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 is the origin of
an
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the
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 ultimate environment. In conclusion,
species
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 of
plants
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 and
animals
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 are the
base
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basis
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 of
whole
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the whole
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 planet. I believe that the main problem of our time is the loss of
species
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 of
plants
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 and
animals
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. The balanced
food
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 chain we have kept the stable
biodiversity
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 we have.

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grammar
Work on grammar and word choice to make lines short and clear.
coherence
Make ideas flow with clear links like but, also, so.
content
Give one solid example for each point, to back it up.
stance
The writer states a clear view and uses 'I firmly agree'.
structure
There is a plan with intro, body, and conclusion.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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