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14.With computers and the Internet, people can study and work without going to school or a company. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

People
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 may
work
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 and learn without attending a school or an office thanks to computers and the Internet.
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 essay will argue that despite the lack of social interaction that they may face from
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 phenomenon, the benefit of being flexible and having a
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 of
freedom
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 far outweighs any drawbacks.
People
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 who can
work
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 and
study
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 or
work
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 without the need
of going
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 to school or a company may
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 a lack of communication or relationships in their lives because of
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. These individuals may feel a bit isolated
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 they are working or studying because they believe that they don't have enough relationships.
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, they will end up hating their jobs or studies and may even abandon them.
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, a recent MIT
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 shows that 62% of
people
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 who
work
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 or
study
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 online in America have a
sense
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 of isolation and loneliness.
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, I believe that they can strengthen their relationships with their families or friends, and they are
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feel lonely again. Working and studying from home is very flexible, and it gives
people
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 a
sense
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 of
freedom
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. Those
people
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 can accomplish their tasks, whether it is for working or studying, whenever and wherever they want
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 the need to go to a specific place.
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, during the COVID-19 pandemic, millions of students and employees worked and studied from home. They were able to continue their education and jobs without going to
schools
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school
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 or
offices
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office
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, which clearly showed the flexibility and
freedom
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 of
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 system. I believe that
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 gives both employees and students much more flexibility than attending school or an office and eclipses any fear about the isolation and lack of social interaction that they might face. In conclusion,
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 working and studying from home may sometimes lead to a
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 of isolation, the advantages of flexibility, independence, and the ability to balance personal and professional life make it a far more beneficial system.
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, the
freedom
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 and opportunities provided by online
work
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 and
study
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 clearly outweigh their potential drawbacks.

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task
State a clear view in the introduction and keep it steady through the essay; make one main idea per paragraph and end each with a link to the next.
task
Give more proof or examples for the main ideas; check facts and keep ideas true and easy to see.
strength
The essay has a clear view that online work and study can be good, and it starts with this idea.
strength
The topic makes sense and is easy to follow, with a plan of talking about isolation and then freedom.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Flexibility
  • Accessibility
  • Customization
  • Work-life balance
  • Remote assessments
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Discipline
  • Collaboration
  • Isolation
  • Hands-on experience
  • Technological divide
  • Digital literacy
  • Hybrid model
  • Infrastructure
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