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Some people think that we born with talent others say we need to work to succeed. What is your opinion?

In recent years, the question of whether some
individuals
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 are born with innate
talent
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 has been widely debated.
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 others argue that no one is born with a specific ability and that they need to develop it through effort, I believe that some children are born with
talent
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 because they inherit genes from their parents.
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, children still require their parents' encouragement to succeed.
This
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 essay will discuss why I support the latter view.
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, without hard work, natural abilities alone cannot guarantee long-term success. Even highly talented
individuals
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 need to regularly practice so that they become resilient.
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, Renolad is well-renowned for being a football player, but as we know, he persisted in intense training and perseverance.
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,
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talent
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 may give
individuals
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 an initial advantage, it is persistence and dedication that ultimately determine who reaches the highest level. People who rely only on
talent
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 may stop progressing once challenges arise,
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 hardworking
individuals
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 continue improving and often surpass naturally gifted people.
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, research has shown that students who consistently study and practice outperform naturally intelligent peers who put in little effort. In conclusion,
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 natural
talent
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 can provide a useful head start, I firmly believe that hard work and consistent effort are more important for long-term success. With dedication, anyone can achieve excellence, regardless of their natural abilities.

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task
Your view is not clear. Pick one main stance and keep it.
task
task
Use one strong example per idea and explain it.
coherence
Each paragraph should have one main idea.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas relate.
coherence
Clear markers like First, Second, and In conclusion.
task
There is a visible plan with an introduction and conclusion.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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