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The map show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment.

The map show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment.
The map below displays a current blueprint of an office structure and plans for its future reconstruction.
Overall
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, the office is rectangular in shape. The office is going to be completely transformed with the removal of the kitchen and the canteen. They will
also
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 replace the east
grass
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area
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 with a meeting
area
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 and replace the west
grass
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area
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to
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with
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 an outdoor seating
area
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. In detail, the most noticeable additions are the meeting and the outdoor seating areas. The
grass
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area
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 on the right is going to be replaced
into
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with
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 a meeting
area
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 with a couple of chairs and a coffee machine,
they
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and they
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 will
also
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 remove the WCs to the top right of the future meeting
area
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.
Whereas
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 the
grass
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area
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 on the left is going to be replaced with an outdoor seating
area
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 with a pack of chairs. The main entrance is going to be relocated from the bottom right to the bottom centre.
Moreover
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, they will combine the four offices into two large ones, and two new offices will be set up on the site of the kitchen and the canteen;
therefore
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, there will be four large offices
instead
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 of four small ones.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grass, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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