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Writing Samples
Band 4

The plans show Ashford in 2010 and Ashford now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans compare Ashford
city
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 in the present time to its equivalent in 2010. In summary, the
city
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 has gone through major development regarding
city
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 infrastructures
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however
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,
this
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 has left its negative footprints on nature as well. Regarding the
city
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 accessibility, by finishing the bridge over the river , the direct road has been opened to the public to ease
city
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 access. Historically the transportation was just by ferry ,
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 no vehicle could find its way through the
city
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. One new thing to mention is the Yacht marina that not only appears on the map , but
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 has its own dedicated road access connected to the main road too. Many yachts are now stopping at the side of
Tam
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the Tam
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 at the marina. Despite the development and evolution the
city
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 has seen,
it is clear that
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due to
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 the impact of
such
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 developments, the green area, opposite side of marina, has been eradicated and all wildlife within was impacted.

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Task response
The essay needs a clear plan. Start with a short intro that says what you will tell. Then add two body parts: one for 2010, one for now. End with a short line that sum up.
Coherence and cohesion
Put the ideas in a easy order. Each idea should have a small topic sentence. Use words that tell how things are different or the same.
Task response
Use the facts you say. Say what is in 2010 and what is now. Keep language simple and correct.
Language control
Check the grammar in long sentences. Break them into two or three short lines.
Strength
The first line shows the task that is asked.
Strength
Some links connect ideas.
Strength
The text mentions place like the river bridge and marina.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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