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The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban and rural households in a European country that had acces between 1999 and 2004.

The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban and rural households in a European country that had acces between 1999 and 2004.
The graph above
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 illustrates household internet
availabilities
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availability
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 for different urban/suburban and rural communities
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 in the time frame of 1999-2004. In all these years, urban and suburban households have maximum access to
this
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 facility
which
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 peaked
2004
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in 2004
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to
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at
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 more than 50%. The rural households
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on
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, on
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 the other
hand
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hand,
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 did not have that much approach with maximum peaking in 2004 as well
but
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 only around 35%. There
can be seen
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is
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 a sharp contrast between
two
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the two
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 different communities.
However
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, it can be observed
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 that the trend has been steadily increasing in both types of areas, with more and more people getting information on
internet
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the internet
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 with every passing year
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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