An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individual and companies to shopping online?

Nowadays, we can notice clearly that shopping online
have been becoming
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the most well-known way for buying in the whole world. It can control
on
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individual
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individuals
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and
in
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at
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the same time
companies
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.
First,
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a numbers
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numbers
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number
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of
people
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see that buying online can
benifites
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benefit
them
on
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in
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a lot of
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ways
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. It can save their time because they will not need to go out and face
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roads.
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, some cities are so hot and the
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temperature
reach
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to
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50
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degrees
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like
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, like
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saudi arabia
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Saudi Arabia
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, so
this
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does not
encurges
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encourage
people
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to go to
molls
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malls
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.
For instance
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, I prefer to stay at home and do shopping online,
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especially
in
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during
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eids
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Eid
, because most
the
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of the
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routs
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routes
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are closed as a
reselt
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result
of
crowd
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the crowd
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transports
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transport
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.
Second,
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these huge numbers of
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damaged
online can impact well on the marks.
Companies
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can increase their
econmic
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economy
fastly
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quickly
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by shopping online
because
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because,
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as we
know
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know,
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many
people
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spend caples of hours on
phons
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phones
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for
whatching
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watching
the
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last
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latest
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prodects
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products
. If
companies
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do
advertisments
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advertisements
, they will
atract
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attract
more
people
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.
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addition
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addition,
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they will be
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trended
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by
coustomers
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customers
.
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, some
companies
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do not have the quality and are not expensive
a lot
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at all
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, but because the ability of
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their martking
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martking
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marketing
and
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ability and
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depending on
technologi
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technology
, they could profit more than others.
To sum up
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,
mabey
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maybe
in the
feuture
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future
, the significant order on shopping online will replace the stores because now
people
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and
companies
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are aware
how
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of how
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they can keep their powers.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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the
prizes
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prices
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will be decreased and more discounts in most products.

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language
Fix many spell and grammar mistakes; write short, clear sentences.
structure
Make a clear plan: one opening line, two parts for sides, and a clear end.
content
Use real and small examples to show how online buying helps people and shops.
content
The essay shows both good and bad points.
structure
Some link words are used to join ideas.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...
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