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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of national consumer expenditure by category - 2002

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of national consumer expenditure by category - 2002
The table illustrates the
comparision
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comparison
about
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of
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customers
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customers'
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 spending
money
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 on various
products group
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product groups
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 from five different countries in 2002. All units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, everyone
were
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was
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 spending less
money
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 on luxury and study
purpose
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purposes
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, spending
for
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on
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 nutrition was the highest in all the nations,
while
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 for clothing average
money
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 was spent
from
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by
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a
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apply
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five countries.
In addition
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, Turkey
spending
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spends
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 the highest
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money
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amount
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for
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on
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the
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apply
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eating
habit
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habits
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,
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;
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however
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, Spain
spending
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spends
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 the lowest for leisure and education.
Firstly
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, Turkey has the highest
spend
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spending
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 on nutrition
with
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, with
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 32.14, followed by Ireland with 28.91,
while
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 the lowest
money
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 spent by Sweden
with
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, with
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 15.77
for
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, for
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 the same category.
Moreover
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, for fashion and
footwear
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footwear,
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 the highest
money
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9
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, 9
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per
cent
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cent,
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 was spent by Italy, followed by Turkey with 6.43.
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, 6.51 and 6.43 per cent
spent
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were spent
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 by Spain and Ireland
respectively
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, respectively
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,
while
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 the lowest amount
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was spend
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spend
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spent
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 by Sweden in 2002.
Lastly
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, for luxury and study, again the highest wealth
shared
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is shared
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 by Italy with 4.35, followed by 3.22 for Sweden and 3.20 for Italy.
Furthermore
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, the other two
nation
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nations
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share
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was
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around 2 per cent, where the lowest share by Spain for study and leisure in 2002.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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