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In many countries, a small number of people have extremley high annual incomes. These people should be required to pay a much higher rate of income tax. To what extend do yo agree or disagree with this opinion?

In today`s
fast paced
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 world, in many nations,
small
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a small
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amount
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number
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 of individuals earn
extreamley
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extremely
higher
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high
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 yearly
income
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, a higher
rate
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 of
income
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tax
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 should be paid by them annually. In my opinion,
i am
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I
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 completely agree with the statement that rich
people
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 should pay
higher
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a higher
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rate
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 of
tax
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 compared to
medium class
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middle-class
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people
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.
To begin
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 with, high
earner
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earners
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 of
money
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 should pay
higher
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a higher
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 amount of
tax
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 annually compared to medium class person.
Due to
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this
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,
middle class
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middle-class
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 person
fulfill
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fulfil
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there
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their
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 basic needs in everyday life
,
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;
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 they cannot save more
money
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,
sometimes
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and sometimes
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 they may not be able to save anything from their wages.
However
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,
people
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 with higher
packages
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incomes
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 may save huge
amout
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amounts
 of
money
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 and spend
money
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for
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on
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luxury
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a luxury
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 lifestyle, so they should pay
higher
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a higher
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rate
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 of
tax
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 than
normal
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a normal
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 person.
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, there was
a
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apply
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research done by Western Sydney University which says many authorities set
a
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apply
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various
tax
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rate
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rates
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 and
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tax free
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tax-free
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income
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 according
persons
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person's
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 yearly
income
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, where
small
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a small
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amount
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number
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 of
people
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 pay more
tax
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, because their
income
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 is
the
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apply
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higher.
Moreover
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, higher
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tax
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taxes
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 charged from the rich
people
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 and celebrities, is contribute
for
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to
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 the
nations
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nation's
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economy
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.
As a result
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,
people
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 with average wages may not
able
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be able
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 to contribute much
for
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to
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nation
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the nation
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,
where
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whereas
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people
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 who
ern
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earn
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 millions of dollars
they
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apply
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may donate more
for
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to
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country
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the country
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,
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this
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money
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 is very helpful in the growth of
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economy
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the economy
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.
Furthermore
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, generally each citizen
paying
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pays
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same
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the same
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tax
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 towards
purchase
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purchases
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 they
made
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, regardless of their
income
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, so the ministry should charge more on
income
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tax
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.
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, there was an article in the Times of India which
mention
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mentions
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 high
eraning
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high-earning
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people
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 paying 70 per cent
tax
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 to
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economy
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the economy
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, which is key for the developing nation. In conclusion,
small
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a small
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 number of
higher earning
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higher-earning
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people
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 should pay more
tax
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 than common
citizen
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citizens
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, which is more helpful in the growth of
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economy
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the economy
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, because everyone
pay
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pays
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same
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the same
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tax
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 on buying. In my view,
higher
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a higher
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rate
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 of
income
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tax
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 for rich
people
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 is
nessesary
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necessary
.

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structure
Start with a clear plan. State your main point in one line and restate it in the end.
coherence
Keep ideas in order. Use linking words like 'first', 'also', 'then', 'however' to connect ideas.
language
Use correct grammar and small words. Check spelling so more people can read it easily.
content
Give clear examples that match the point. Do not say things that look like facts unless you can show it.
stance
The writer shows a clear view on the issue.
content
There are topic ideas and some effort to give reasons.
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