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Some people think that charity organizations should only offer help to people of their own country. But others believe that these organizations should give aid to people in great need wherever they live. Discuss both views and give your opinion

In recent times, the issue of
charity
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organizations
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organisations
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behavior
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behaviour
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 has emerged as a matter of significant concern in the general public. Some individuals maintain that these
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organizations
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organisations
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 should help people in their own
country
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 only.
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 others argue that they should give aid to people who need
helps
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help
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eventhough
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even though
 they are
in
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apply
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in the same
country
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with
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as
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 the
organization
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organisation
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. Both
view
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views
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 have valid
pionts
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points
; I would discuss them before giving my own opinion. On the one hand, lots of
humanitararian
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humanitarian
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organizations
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 mentioned that they
gives
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give
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 attention to their own
country
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 first because of the donor expectations. Normally, when people are donating, they expect that
those
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 money would improve their communities.
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, the limited resources
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also
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 an important point,
beceause
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because
 the
charity
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 may not have enough money and staff to
support
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survivor
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survivors
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 globally.
For instance
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, if four
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country
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countries
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 are
survived
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struggling with
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 an issue
one
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, one
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 of them is
thier
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their
 nation
and
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, and
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 they are struggling, the
charity
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 may help their community first.
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, it is equally crucial to consider the argument for being
humanitarian
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a humanitarian
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 duty. Based on the human being
it
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, it
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 is
matter
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a matter
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 that
human
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humans
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 deserve basic need
which
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, which
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 includes help
so
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, so
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, no matter who they are or where they
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live
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lives
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lives,
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 it is fundamental to help them.
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, some countries are facing global crises
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, which
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 include
,
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apply
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 war, famine, and natural disasters.
For
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this
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 reason, these nations need
a
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apply
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global
support
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 because they are not able to
slove
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solve
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 it by themselves and they should not be left behind. In conclusion,
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While
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 it is true that
charity
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organizations
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organisations
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 should
support
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 their communities, which
lead
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leads
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 to achieving donor expectations,
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, it is undeniable that supporting individuals globally and making sure that everyone
are being
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is
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 able to
acsess
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access
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needed
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needs
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 are
also
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essentail
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essential
. Personally, I
belive
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believe
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 that humanitarian
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organizations
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organisations
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 should find a balance between giving international
support
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 and local help.
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, a
balance
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 approach is necessary to address
this
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 issue effectively.

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task response
Plan your essay before you write. Put the two views and your own view in a clear order.
coherence
Use simple link words to show how ideas go together and to move from one point to another.
grammar
Check spell and form of words. Use common and short forms.
examples
Give one example for each main idea so the point is clear.
structure
There is a clear plan with an intro, body, and ending.
content
The writer tries to discuss both sides and adds a final view.
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