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The graph below shows the changes in production (millions)of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the changes in production (millions)of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares
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production
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the production
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 of
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suit
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suits
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,
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dress
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dresses
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, and
coat
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coats
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 between 1990 and 2010.
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, the
production
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 of
coat
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coats
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 increased steadily,
while
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 the
production
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 of
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suit
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suits
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 had a fluctuation and was followed by
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dress
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dresses
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 during the
period
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 from 1990 to 2010. In 1990,
suit
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 was the most common
production
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. The
production
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 of
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suit
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suits
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 rose slightly in the first five years and
then
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 decreased from 23
million
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 in 1995 to 16
million
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 in 2005, and the
production
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 of
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suit
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suits
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 recovered by 3
million
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 in 2010. Coat was the less common
production
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 in the beginning. But it rose dramatically during the
period
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 from 1990 to 2005, it surpassed
dress
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 and
suit
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 in 1995 and 2001, and it became the most common
production
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 in 2010.
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 the
production
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 of
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dress
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dresses
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 was 10
million
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 in 1990, it fluctuated considerably in
this
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period
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. By the end of the
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period
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period,
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dress
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 became
the
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apply
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less common
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production
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in production
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, suit, dress, period, million with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Production volume
  • Garment factory
  • Trend (increasing, decreasing)
  • Comparative analysis
  • Fluctuations
  • Market demand
  • Technological advancements
  • Production capacity
  • Raw material availability
  • Economic conditions
  • Notable observations
  • Significant shifts
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