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The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.

The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.
The map illustrates the possible sites for the
conctruction
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construction
 of the new school in the
town
Use synonyms
 of Canterbury.
Overall
Linking Words
, the new school is possibly to be
build
Wrong verb form
built
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 in the eastern side of Canterbury, or in the downtown. The
town
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 itself is small, which has two main roads and
the
Correct article usage
a
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only
Correct word choice
single
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one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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university. The first possible site for the new school is in the
Northern-east
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North-east
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 area of the
town
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, and
much
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very
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 close to the road
that is
Linking Words
 the way to get to Sturry
sity
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city
, with
population
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a population
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 of 7000.
The another
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Another
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 predicted area for the construction of
education
Correct article usage
an education
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 facility is in the
Town
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 Centre, and not away
to
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from
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 the road, which people use to get to Chartham city. But both of the areas are far away from the university, which is in the North of the village.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • contrast
  • location
  • accessibility
  • residential areas
  • facilities
  • traffic
  • transportation
  • environment
  • cost
  • feasibility
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