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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (HOANG NHI)

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (HOANG NHI)
The table illustrates the proportion of three items of
expenditures
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expenditure
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 in 5 European
countries
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 in 2002.
Overall
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, food/drink/tobacco was the most popular
expenditures
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expenditure
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 in all five
countries
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, followed by clothing/footwear and leisure/education respectively.
To begin
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 with, Turkey was the highest spender
of
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on
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 food/drink/tobacco by 32.14 per
cent
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.
Secondly
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, 28.91 per
cent
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 of Irish people allocated their wages
on
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to
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 food/drink/tobacco. Only three
countries
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, which were Italy, Spain, and Sweden only allocated less than 19 per
cent
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 of their wages for
this
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 expenditure.
On the other hand
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, Italian people
was
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were
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 more interested in clothing/wear, because they
spend
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spent
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 9 per
cent
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for
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on
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 clothing. Meanwhile,
Sweeden
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Sweden
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 only allocated 5.40 per
cent
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 in clothing,
became
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becoming
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 the lowest spender
from
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among
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 the other
countries
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.
all
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All
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 those
countries
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has
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have
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 less interest in leisure/education, because they
spended
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spent
 less than 5 per
cent
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 in one single year. The highest
propotion
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proportion
 was shown in Turkey by 4.35 per
cent
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and
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, and
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 Spain was the lowest value among the others.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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