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Professional sports persons are often idolized by the youth. Some people think that they, therefore, have a responsibility to be role models at all times for children. Do you agree or disagree?

Popular sports persons are highly followed by the youth of a country.
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, some people often want them to portray
perfect
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a perfect
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 personality like
character
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a character
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 to help young people
to
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not indulge in unsocial practices. I agree with it
and
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, and
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 in most
cases
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 it should be taken seriously.
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, teenagers imitate players more for their personal life rather than their performance in the field.
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,
In
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in
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India
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India,
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 many people started following a hairstyle after seeing it done on a cricketer. That hairstyle really became a style symbol
and
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, and
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 the player was a fashion icon during his era. So, the professional players' personal choices are far more influential than how they act in their respective
field
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fields
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.
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,
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 it doesn't appear to be more profound until something wrong is done by a sportsperson.
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, many professional players got
criticized
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criticised
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 in the past for advertising alcohol, smoking and many other wrongful products.
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 promotes marketing of addictive products and takes
young
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the young
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 generation
into
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false
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a false
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 direction.
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, a popular personality should always think about
his
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their
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 public image and promote only those things that
uplifts
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uplift
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 youngsters rather than
destroys
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destroy
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 their character. In the conclusion, many exemplary scenarios illustrate how a famous person could have an impact on a teenager and the whole new generation.
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, acting irresponsibly in public could have a drastic effect and should be avoided.

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task
In your view, say yes or no in a short line at the start and keep to one side. Give one main reason, then add one more idea. Try to add a small counter idea too to show you see both sides.
coherence
Make links clear. Use small connecting words like First, Also, But, So. Keep each idea in its own line or in short groups. Make sure each paragraph has one main idea.
strength
You show a clear view on the topic and pick the side you want.
strength
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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