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The line graph below shows average carbon dioxide (co²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The line graph below shows average carbon dioxide (co²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
The line graph illustrates the average proportion of carbon emissions per head in the four countries
bewtween
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between
 four decades from 1967 to 2007. All units are measured in metric tonnes.
Overall
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, the highest
consitant
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consistent
 emission per person was in the UK, followed by Sweden, which finished the lowest
in
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at
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 the end of
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period
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the period
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.
In addition
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, the lowest pollution was in Portugal, throughout the
period
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,
while
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 Italy had the average air pollution.
Firstly
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, the United Kingdom was the highest in
the
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apply
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1967 with above 10, had
the
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a
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declined
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declining
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 trend,
still
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and still
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completed
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remained
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 at the top in 2007 with just below 10.
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, Sweden had
the
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apply
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just above 8
in
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at
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start
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the start
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 of the
period
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, which increased for
following
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the following
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 decade to above 10,
then
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 fell
consistantly
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consistently
 and reached
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its
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 lowest in 2007, which was below 6.
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, Italy was at just above 4 in 1967,
then
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 rose gradually and
completed
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peaked
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 at around 8
in
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by
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 the end of the
period
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.
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, Portugal was the lowest in the first decade, after that had the same trend as Italy had and reached
at
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more than 5, after four decades.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average
  • carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions
  • per person
  • line graph
  • trend
  • decreased
  • increased
  • highest
  • lowest
  • peak
  • decline
  • stable period
  • external factors
  • environmental policies
  • industrial activity
  • comparison
  • data set
  • period covered
  • analyze
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