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Writing Samples
Band 5

The two maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now .

The two maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now .
The two maps illustrate changes made to a bookstore since 2000.
Overall
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,
bookstore
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the bookstore
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 has undergone significant development , with
addition
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the addition
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 of new facilities and
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the modernization
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modernization
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modernisation
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 of existing ones . In 2000 , the bookstore contained mainly fiction and non-fiction books
which
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, which
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 took
most
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up most
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 space . In terms of other types, there were 3 bookshelves (cooking, hobbies and art) in a row .
However
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, these types were undeveloped. Nowadays, fiction bookshelves
is
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are
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 divided into 4
part
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parts
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 for different kinds of books.
Non-fiction
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The non-fiction
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 part was rebuilt into
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a caffe
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caffe
Correct your spelling
cafe
and
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, and
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 3 bookshelves were reconstructed
to
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into
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 tables . And non-fiction is located
on
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in
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the right
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right top
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top right
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 corner . Service disk , travel books and
new
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a new
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 book stayed unchanged.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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