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To solve the problem of traffic congestion govt should provide free public transport 24*7. To what extent do you agree or disagree. more disagree as there could be so many other ways to sort it out. It helps companies to change the working hours

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Traffic congestion is an ongoing concern among the public. Many people believe that providing free 24/7 public
transport
 could be a possible solution to address the issue. In my opinion,
while
 I agree with
this
 statement, I believe that there are other methods which could be more beneficial in tackling the problem.
This
 essay will discuss my opinion in detail with relevant examples. On the one hand,
this
 approach has immense social benefits and reduces the environmental impacts.
This
 is to say that
such
 a free mode of
transport
 improves accessibility for
lower income
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lower-income
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 groups and reduces road accidents which ensures public safety.
In addition
, it helps in reducing carbon emissions, decreases pollution and promotes sustainable travel.
For instance
, it is evident that it certainly improves air quality because of fewer cars on the roads.
On the other hand
, we could implement alternative solutions to combat the traffic issue in order to minimise the economic implications of implementing free public
transport
.
Firstly
, budget considerations must be taken into account before we make
this
 method a widespread reality as it directly impacts the tax-paying citizens.
However
, we can introduce alternatives
such
 as encouraging carpooling or raising congestion charges.
Furthermore
, the government can influence remote work incentives which motivate employees to work from home.
For example
, in Canada, IT companies have introduced remote work which significantly reduced commuters during peak hours.
To conclude
,
while
 recognising the benefits of a free public
transport
 system, stressing the importance of alternatives which would reduce the burden of economic impacts,
also
 help us to overcome the challenges.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear overall progression and that paragraphs follow a logical sequence with cohesive devices appropriately used to assist readers in understanding the flow of your ideas.
task achievement
Fully extend your main ideas and provide more in-depth exploration of the key points. Include specific examples to clearly illustrate your points and enhance the quality of your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • public transport
  • overcrowding
  • infrastructure
  • maintenance
  • telecommuting
  • alternative transport
  • flexible work arrangements
  • staggered hours
  • investment
  • efficient
  • bike lanes
  • pedestrian paths
  • congestion charges
  • tolls
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