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More business meeting are taking place online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the same?

As everybody
realize
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realises
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 that online
business
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meetings
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become
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have become
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 so widespread and popular nowadays.
This
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along with
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 some advantages and
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also
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disadvantages
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.
This
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couple
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a couple
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 of
disadvantages
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 and advantages of online
business
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meetings
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. The two main advantages of online
business
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meetings
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 are being
time
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 management friendly and easy to
connection
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 with people who are far away. When people arrange a
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meetings
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meeting
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, we all need to arrange our
time
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 to be in
this
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 meeting
in
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on
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time
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.
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, in online
business
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meetings
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, you do not need to take
your
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apply
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time
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 before
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meetings
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apply
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and after
meetings
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. You
dont
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don't
 need to lose your
time
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 for reaching
meeting
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the meeting
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place
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 and leaving from
this
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 meeting
place
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. In
similar
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a similar
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 way,
in addition
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 to
this
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, by making online
business
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meeting
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meetings
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, you do not need to travel to
another
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other
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 countries and cities for
meetings
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 that are even so short.
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, you have
meeting
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a meeting
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 in Japan and you are in Turkey. You do not need to lose your
time
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 to travel to
japan
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Japan
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, you can connect
through
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apply
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online and
make
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hold
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 your
meetings
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 without travelling.
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, there are two main
disadvantages
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 of holding online
business
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meetings
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which
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, which
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 are not obtaining appropriate conditions and technical problems. As
all
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far all
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i
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I
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 know, people cannot have appropriate conditions when they are
home
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at home
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 and
also
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in another
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another
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other
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 places.
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, you can be in
noisy
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a noisy
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place
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 or
crowded
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a crowded
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place
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 that
disables
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distracts
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 your
focusing
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focus
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. We cannot
provide always
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always provide
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good
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a good
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 situation.
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, we may have some technical problems so that we cannot possess
a
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the
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 right
condition
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conditions
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in
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for
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meeting
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the meeting
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.
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, you can have
internet
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an internet
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 connection problem that removes your connection with teammates.
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Also
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kind
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kinds
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 of technological
equipments
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equipment
such
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 as
mouse
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a mouse
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,
microphone
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a microphone
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 and
keyboard
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a keyboard
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 might
obtain
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cause
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problem
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problems
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 for working
in
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apply
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proper
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way
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apply
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To conclude
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,
while
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 online
business
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 meeting ,which are being widespread nowadays, has many
advantage
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advantages
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 and beneficial sides, it has
also
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disadvantages
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have disadvantages
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 and negative sides.

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structure
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structure
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vocabulary
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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