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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development

Some people suggest that
foodstuff
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foodstuffs
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of
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from
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another
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other
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national
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nations
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 are sold at supermarkets and
buyer
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buyers
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 can easily
by
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buy
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it
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them
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, I totally think
this
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 is a positive development.
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,
this
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 essay will discuss
,
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 why
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the comsumption
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comsumption
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consumption
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food
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of food
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 processed
from
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in
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 global countries can bring
the
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world development.
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, it will discuss the positive impact
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 may have on
a
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the
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 mental health of that country.
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, having the option to buy
food
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 in local markets or malls
,
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can bring
positive
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a positive
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 effect for the economy of different states .
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 is especially so if the person who
being
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an
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a
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food
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vloger
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vlogger
 or tiktoker , they
want
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wants
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 to try more specialities of another region and introduce
it
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them
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for
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to
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 their fans because of
that
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apply
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it
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which
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 could lead to some people
would like
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wanting
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 to buy .
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Therefore
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its
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it
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 allows the government to
accept
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import more
food
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 produced
from
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by
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multinational
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multinationals
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.
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, many content creators have
advertising
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advertised
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VietNam’s
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Vietnam’s
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 durian
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; therefor
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therefore
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therefor
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therefor,
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this
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these
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 products are exported to Europe and many other countries,which made
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Vietnam’s
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aricultural
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agricultural
 revenue in 2017
increasing
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 by 7% compared to GDP in 2016.
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, consumers can develop their shopping experience when they
came
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come
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 to a supermarket and have more
option
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options
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 for
meal
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meals
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. Despite
of
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apply
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having only canned
food
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 from
local
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the local
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 market , nowadays we have
diverse
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a diverse
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 type of
food
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 .
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,
according to
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 an article published in VTV1 in 2024 , a survey of people who
comsume
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consume
diverse dishes from many countries in Viet Nam showed that 83% of
they
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them
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 said they had developed
overall
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 mental health when having
favourite
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their favourite
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food
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 after all
day
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day's
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working
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work
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. In conclusion,in my view, there are more positive elements than negative, as there are clear benefits to individuals who have the opportunity to buy
foodstuff
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food
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 at the supermarket, including increasing
a
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the
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 economy for
country
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countries
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 all over the world.
However
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, there will be foods that are not suitable for some shopping tastes , so they need to find and consider carefully before choosing to pick.

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structure
Plan first. State your view in the intro and finish with a clear conclusion.
structure
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Use a simple topic sentence.
grammar
Use simple, correct grammar. Watch plural and verb form mistakes.
content
Give real, clear examples and explain how they prove your point.
vocabulary
Fix spellings and use common words well. E.g. improve words like 'consumption', 'Vietnam', 'durian'.
idea
The essay shows a clear view that global food trade can be good.
content
The writer tries to use examples to support points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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