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In many countries, women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Introduction
It is often argued that members of society
working
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work
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 in
her
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their
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career
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careers
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full time
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full-time
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.
some
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 people claim that
women
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 and
man
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men
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share
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household
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 responsibilities,
whereas
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 others are convinced that
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 related to the ladies.
This
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 essay will discuss both perspectives and provide my personal opinion.
Body paragraph 1
One significant argument supporting the first view is that it
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 for
women
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 and men to
share
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a
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household
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home
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tasks
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.
In other words
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,workers spend more than half of their day in the career so it's
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share
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 the work
in
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her
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apply
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home
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.
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,it's
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share
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 the
home
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tasks
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like
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apply
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women
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like women
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take
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 part
of
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 the work
like
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:'cooking
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otherwise
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, otherwise
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 the man take a cleaning of rooms
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clearly
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day,
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household
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tasks
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 are done.
Body paragraph 2
In contrast
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,advocates of the opposite opinion argue
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that
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home
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tasks
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it's
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are
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women
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.
This
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 is mainly because in our community
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Asia
the
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, the
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home
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tasks
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 are for
a
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apply
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woman
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women
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,in our
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society,
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 the work in our homes
include
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includes
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 cooking or cleaning and other
tasks
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 are done by
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apply
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women's
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women
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.
As a result
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, in
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in
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 the end of the
day
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day,
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 the woman
are
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 in a bad mood because of
a
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the
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household
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.
Conclusion
To sum up
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although
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 both sides present valid arguments,I firmly believe that
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 and men should
share
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 the responsibility of their
home
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 to make a good life together.

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task response
State a clear opinion in the opening and keep it in mind as you give reasons.
task response
Give 2 or 3 clear reasons with simple examples to support your view.
coherence
Use simple linking words to join ideas and keep ideas in order.
coherence
Check grammar and spell common words so the meaning is easy to follow.
content
The writer tries to discuss both sides.
structure
There is an opening and a conclusion.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender equality
  • Division of labor
  • Household chores
  • Work-life balance
  • Burnout
  • Efficiency
  • Workload distribution
  • Professional advancement
  • Gender roles
  • Cooperation
  • Mutual respect
  • Communication
  • Partnership
  • Stereotypes
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