The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed in 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales

The line graph illustrates three types of crimes and the number of cases committed from 1970 to 2005 in England and Wales.

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, three different types of crimes showed an upward trend during the period of 35 years,

while

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car theft and house

burgling

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burglary

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was

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were

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fluctuating, street robbery was relatively stable. The figure for car theft committed was the highest among all groups. There were 0.40

million

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cases committed in

1970

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1970,

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then

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gradually increased in the following 20 years.

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it rose sharply in 1990, from 1

million

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cases to 1.6

million

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;

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, it dropped dramatically in 2000 and 2005, ending up at 1

million

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. The number of house burglaries committed fluctuated between 0.2

million

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and around 0.7

million

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in 1970 and 2005.

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, the data of street robbery was steady, it remained at almost 0

million

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in the

former

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past

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20 years, and slightly climbed to 0.2

million

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in the end.

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Sep 12, 2025

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

151 words

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The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed in 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales

The governments should give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on, even if they are unemployed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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