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Band 3.5

Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

It is often argued that
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 it is better to
work
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 for a large company than a small one.The writer strongly agrees with the statement and
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 essay will elaborate
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 the reasons for his view.
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,it is
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 undeniable fact that
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working in a large industry gives you more
experience
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.
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 is because
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many big
companies
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 are
well equipped
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.
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therefore
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 helps employees to get more knowledge on the tools used.A good example is the health sector.In big laboratories,all the necessary equipment needed to run tests
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 supplied in there.
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, Medical Laboratory scientists get more
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 in these sectors.A study revealed that
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 health workers who
work
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 at big hospitals have more
experience
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 than those who
work
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 in smaller settings.
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 clearly explains why people should choose big industries.
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,people who
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 in bigger settings earn good salaries.People who
work
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 in large
companies
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 have
good
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a good
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salary
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 rate.
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,jobs in Urban cities pay
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a good
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 amount of
salaries
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salary
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 is big industries.They pay well
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 helps reduce
financial
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the financial
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 burden of folks.A good example is big Mining
companies
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.
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 field offers good
salary
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 rates.A survey conducted at Cape Coast revealed that big
companies
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 offer
high
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higher
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salary
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 rates as compared to small
companies
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.
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 clearly justifies the need to
work
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 in large
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work places
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workplaces
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. In conclusion,
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 writer
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 agrees that working in large
companies
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 is better than small
companies
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 since one enjoys the benefit of
good
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a good
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salary
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 and exposure to more
experience
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.

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structure
Make a plan. Write an intro, then two to three body parts, and finish with a short ending.
grammar
Use simple and clear grammar. Fix small errors and use 'an' before a vowel sound.
content
Add more ideas. Explain how each idea helps the view.
cohesion
Use linking words to connect ideas: first, also, in addition, for example, however.
accuracy
Check spelling and punctuation to help the reader.
stance
The writer shows a clear view and states it in the end.
content
Examples are used to support ideas.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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