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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

There is an annual work party next month, which is held every year. Write a letter to your colleagues to co- arrange the party. In your letter: • Say what would you do differently than last year • Say what you think were some of the things not so good last year • Suggest where to meet to plan for the party.

Dear team, I hope
this
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 letter finds you all in good spirits. I am writing
this
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 letter to share some suggestions about the upcoming annual event on 2 October.
Although
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last
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 year's celebration was truly memorable, there are a few aspects, in my view,
deserve
Correct pronoun usage
that deserve
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 improvement.
To begin
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 with, the dinner menu should incorporate a wider range of
the
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apply
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local cuisines, as several attendees expressed dissatisfaction with the limited choices previously.
Moreover
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, I suggest introducing a few light-hearted activities,
would
Correct pronoun usage
which would
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 make
this
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 event far more engaging and
intreactive
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interactive
.
Last
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 year, the venue was overcrowded, which caused inconvenience to several employees.
Therefore
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, it may be more practical to host the function at the community centre, as it has a larger hall and better facilities.
In addition
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, we should ensure the quality of food is enhanced, given the feedback received
last
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 year. To deliberate
further
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these
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on these
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 arrangements, I have scheduled a meeting in the conference room
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 Friday at 3 PM. I kindly request everyone's presence to finalise the details collectively. Yours faithfully, Amarpreet Singh.

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structure
Put one idea in each paragraph.
lexical
Use simple words and short sentences.
grammar
Check spelling and fix errors like intreactive to interactive.
content
In the plan, say what to do next in a clear way.
coherence
Link ideas with words like next, then, also.
content
The letter shows a clear plan to fix last year's issues.
style
Formal tone and closing fit a work letter.
structure
It asks for a meeting to decide details.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plan
  • party
  • colleagues
  • together
  • differ
  • last year
  • not good
  • better
  • idea
  • theme
  • food
  • drink
  • music
  • games
  • venue
  • date
  • time
  • budget
  • cost
  • people
  • RSVP
  • invite
  • schedule
  • meeting
  • chair
  • team
  • plan ahead
  • backup
  • parking
  • directions
  • coordination
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