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There is an annual work party next month, which is held every year. Write a letter to your colleagues to co- arrange the party. In your letter: • Say what would you do differently than last year • Say what you think were some of the things not so good last year • Suggest where to meet to plan for the party.

Dear team, I hope you all
guys
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are doing well! I am writing
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 letter to
dicuss
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discuss
about
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the annual event that will going to be held on 2 October.
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last
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 year it was a wonderful experience, I think there are certain aspects that we should reconsider.
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, we should add more local cuisines for
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dinner,as
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 time a few staff members were not happy with
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variety of food.
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I think we ought to introduce small fun
acitivities
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activities
,
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 will make
party
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 more enjoyable.
Last
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 year, the party palace was crowded
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 caused inconvenience to several employees. To resolve
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, we should arrange
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party at a local community
center
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, which has a large hall. Apart from that, I think you should improve the food quality, as previous year I received a few complaints about it. To discuss
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 about
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 function, I have arranged a meeting in the conference room on upcoming Friday at 3
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PM. I kindly request you all to attend
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 meeting to discuss
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the arrangements. I look forward to
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 you guys. Yours sincerely, Amarpreet Singh.

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language
Fix spelling and gram mar: wrong words like 'dicuss', 'acitivities' and 'palace'. Use 'discuss', 'activities', 'place'. Also write '3 PM' not '3.PM'.
structure
Put one idea in each paragraph. The second and third para mix many topics. This helps the read easy.
content
Be clear on date and time. Use a direct phrase like 'on Friday, 2 October, at 3 PM'.
style
Use a more formal tone for work letters. Avoid 'guys' if you want a formal tone. You can say 'Dear colleagues' instead.
content
Add small extra details like budget, people to invite, and who will lead the plan. This helps others know what to do next.
content
The letter shows what to change and what went wrong, so it helps planning.
tone
It asks for a meeting with a place and time, which is good for planning.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plan
  • party
  • colleagues
  • together
  • differ
  • last year
  • not good
  • better
  • idea
  • theme
  • food
  • drink
  • music
  • games
  • venue
  • date
  • time
  • budget
  • cost
  • people
  • RSVP
  • invite
  • schedule
  • meeting
  • chair
  • team
  • plan ahead
  • backup
  • parking
  • directions
  • coordination
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