IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

The line graph below shows the number of monthly active users of some social network and messaging services between 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the number of monthly active users of some social network and messaging services between 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates key information about
number
Correct article usage
the number
show examples
 of monthly active users of some social network and messaging services
in
Change preposition
over
show examples
 five years
Punctuation problem
, between
show examples
between
Change preposition
from
show examples
 2010 and 2015.
Overall
Linking Words
,
it is clear that
Linking Words
 Facebook
dramatically
Rephrase
apply
show examples
is the highest
uses
Replace the word
used
show examples
 application from the beginning to the end.
While
Linking Words
other's
Check wording
others'
show examples
 websites
are
Verb problem
have
show examples
 significantly
go
Wrong verb form
gone
show examples
 up.
Firstly
Linking Words
,looking at the details,in
2011
Punctuation problem
2011,
show examples
 Facebook had about 800 of users
Linking Words
while
Punctuation problem
, while
show examples
 Twitter
around
Verb problem
had around
show examples
 150 million
,
Punctuation problem
. In
show examples
in addition
Linking Words
,in
2013
Punctuation problem
2013,
show examples
 most of the apps
are
Wrong verb form
were
show examples
 increasing
about
Change preposition
by about
show examples
 10 %
up
Rephrase
In
show examples
in
Linking Words
addition
Punctuation problem
addition,
show examples
instagram period
Use the right word
Instagram's user base
show examples
 between 2014 and 2015 in one years he is stay the same.
In contrast
Linking Words
,it can be seen that WhatsApp in 2013 had a big devolved he
rise
Wrong verb form
rising
show examples
 mainly
about
Change preposition
by about
show examples
 200 million
up
Change preposition
apply
show examples
.Another significant
points
Fix the agreement mistake
point
show examples
 is
Facebook
Correct word choice
that Facebook
show examples
 had the highest figure
Linking Words
while
Punctuation problem
, while
show examples
instagram
Fix capitalization
Instagram
show examples
record
Wrong verb form
recorded
show examples
 the lowest.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, while".
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • monthly active users
  • social network services
  • messaging services
  • time frame
  • observe a trend
  • fluctuation
  • noticeable increase
  • significant decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • exponential growth
  • relative decline
  • steady rise
  • dramatic fall
  • comparative analysis
What to do next:
Look at other essays: