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The given graph shows the main sources of energy for USA in 1980 and 1990.

The given graph shows the main sources of energy for USA in 1980 and 1990.
The two pie charts illustrate five major sources of energy for the United States in 1980 and 1990. The figures are given in percentages.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there was an upward trend in coal and nuclear sources. Notably, at the beginning of the period, nuclear and hydroelectric
powers
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 constituted the least energy in the US, and oil was the most significant source;
however
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, it was still the largest
at the end
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 of the period.
To begin
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 with, nuclear power accounted for 5% in 1980, and doubled to 10% in 1990.
Similarly
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, coal source made up 22% and
this
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 figure rose to 27% in 1990.
In contrast
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, natural gas
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was 22% in 1980 and witnessed a slight growth of 1% in 1990. The oil energy,
on the other hand
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, experienced a dramatic decrease from 42% to only 33%.
Whereas
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, hydroelectric power remained constant in both years at 5%.

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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