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Band 3.5

Every country in this world has problems with pollution and damage to climate environment. Do you think problems can be solved?

A changing climate is a big issue for many countries. Pollution and damage are affecting our health and nature. These phenomena are susceptible to modifications or can be reduced with different actions from individuals, groups, the government, and industry.
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, the environment will be less impacted and a positive change to our development.
This
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 essay will show how several alternatives can be used to stop these factors. In recent years, there has been an increase in diseases
due to
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 contamination caused by bad air and dirty water, which are the main resources for humanity to survive. Pulmonary and digestive diseases are increasing mainly in young people, interrupting healthy development. Currently, the consumption has increased in our society, with more cars for transportation, more factories and the use of energy, and less strict rules from the government are possible causes of the contamination. By recycling and reusing, we can reduce consumption;
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, fewer factories and less use of energy will not affect our environment.
On the other hand
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, strict rules and penalties from the government against companies are not compatible with green energy. Actioning plans and
behaviors
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, and continuing to work
together
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 can change and stop
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 negative impact.

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structure
Give a clear view in one line at the start. Make a short plan for what you will say.
cohesion
Use clear links to show how ideas fit. Use 'first', 'then', 'and', 'but' to help flow.
structure
Each idea should have its own paragraph. Start with a topic idea, add a small detail.
content
Add more facts or simple examples to prove ideas. Use one example per idea.
grammar
Check if every sentence fits the idea. Remove extra words to be clear.
structure
End with a short let us know the main idea again.
content
The essay has a clear topic about pollution and climate.
structure
There is a sense of plan with a thesis sentence.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • world
  • country
  • people
  • problem
  • solve
  • help
  • change
  • time
  • work
  • plan
  • need
  • use
  • care
  • air
  • water
  • land
  • health
  • life
  • money
  • rule
  • law
  • school
  • story
  • idea
  • team
  • together
  • build
  • grow
  • safe
  • clean
  • green
  • bad
  • more
  • less
  • some
  • all
  • every
  • this
  • that
  • how
  • why
  • when
  • where
  • can
  • could
  • will
  • should
  • must
  • action
  • energy
  • car
  • bus
  • train
  • walk
  • bike
  • pollution
  • dirty
  • waste
  • recycle
  • reuse
  • reduce
  • power
  • sun
  • wind
  • fuel
  • oil
  • plastic
  • food
  • soil
  • nature
  • future
  • government
  • business
  • family
  • city
  • town
  • environment
  • climate
  • system
  • worldwide
  • plan
  • result
  • increase
  • decrease
  • country
  • citys
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