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It is sad that life is becoming increasingly stressful for most people. What is the reason of this phenomenon and how could this problem be solved?

The extent of
stress
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 in
life
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, nowadays, has
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 to a great extent. The major reason for
this
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 is a lack of financial stability in the
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life for
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lives
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most of
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of most
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the
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people
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.
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,
people
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 can decrease their
stress
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, to a great extent, by self-care.
This
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 and its possible solutions
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 and will explicate my point
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. First and foremost, with the rising inflation, almost everyone
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 is struggling to make
their
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ends meet. Most of the individuals are
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 under a constant pressure of earning bread
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 for themself and their families. The
people
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 with employment are stressed about keeping
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their
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job
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jobs
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,
whereas
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,
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 the unemployed
people
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 are worried about finding a job.
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, everyone is
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 about one thing
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 or the other.
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, most of the
people
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 in the corporate
sectors
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sector
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 are always worried
of
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about
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 losing their
job
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jobs
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, even for a small error.
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, too much
stress
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 decreases the quality of
life
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 of an individual. Henceforth, various measures can be taken
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 to help a person come out of their unwanted thoughts. Doing exercise and yoga
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 is one of the most widely recognised means of calming the mind.
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 diet
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 plays an important role in helping a person
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 to come out of
his
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their
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 worrisome mental space. Apart from that, a person should spend time in
self care
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self-care
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, and do the activities
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 that can bring them happiness and peace.
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, meditation has been known for its healing properties, and
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people
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 from falling prey to depression. Conclusively, in today's world,
stress
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 is
unavoidable
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an unavoidable
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 part of one's
life
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, and most of it
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 is
due to
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 the mental load of earning enough to
fulfill
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 the basic needs. But, since it is so harmful, it can be avoided by doing daily exercise and indulging in activities of
self love
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self-love
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.

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structure
Plan a clear 4 part layout: intro, 2 or 3 body para, and a conclusion.
planning
Each paragraph has a main idea in a topic sentence.
content
Stick to one idea per paragraph and add a simple fact or example.
language
Use easy links: First, Also, But, So, Finally.
grammar
Check grammar, use basic verb forms, and keep sentences short.
style
Reduce long phrases and keep the tone simple.
idea
The idea that money stress is a key reason is clear.
content
It gives some fix work, like exercise and diet.
structure
There is a start and an end to the text.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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