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This line graph illustrates the number of tourists who visited Caribbean islands between 2010 and 2018, measured in millions

This line graph illustrates the number of tourists who visited Caribbean islands between 2010 and 2018, measured in millions
The line graph illustrates changes in the percentage of
visitor
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visitors
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went
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who went
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 to
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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total
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the total
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the
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is the
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 most
signifiant
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significant
increased
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increase
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,
while
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visitors
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 who stayed on cruise began with the second lowest point and fluctuation throughout the period.Meanwhile,
visitors
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stayting
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staying
 on cruise ships
remaind
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remained
 stable until
rose
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they rose
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 gradually. At the
beginnig
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beginning
 of
period
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the period
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,
total
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the total
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 stood at 1 million in 2010, it rose dramatically until
2015
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2015,
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leveld
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levelled
 off for one year
and
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, and
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 it
grow
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grew
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repaidly
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rapidly
, reaching around 3.5
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visitors
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million visitors
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 in 2017.
In contrast
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,
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships began at 0.07
after
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, after
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that
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which
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 it
fluctuations
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fluctuated
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 for the following four years
and
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, and
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 it went up sharply
reaching
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, reaching
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 the highest point at 2
visitors
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 over
the
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apply
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time.
Wherease
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Whereas
,
visitors
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 staying on
island
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the island
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 recorded at 0.03 and it remained stable for the first year, after it
grow
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grew
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 slightly
reaching
Punctuation problem
, reaching
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 1.5
visitors
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 in 2015
and
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, and
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then
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 it remained constant for the next three years,
subsequently
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 faced a slight fell
until
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slightly until
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 it
came up
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rose
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 in 2017
reaching
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, reaching
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approxmately
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approximately
 1.5
visitors
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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