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Horse Evolution The diagram shows how the horse evolved through time, with particular emphasis on its foot structure. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Horse Evolution The diagram shows how the horse evolved through time, with particular emphasis on its foot structure. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph below displays the process of development of the horse through millions of
years
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 until
modern
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the modern
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 horse of today.
Overall
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, there was a significant increase in matters of
body
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 size and
bone
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 structure in houses over
centuries
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the centuries
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.
In
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At
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 the beginning of horse existence, it was called by the name of Eohippus around 40
millions
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million
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years
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 ago, their
bone
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 were small, especially their emphasis
with
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on
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 a small
body
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 size. After 10 million
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years
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years,
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 it had a slight
grow
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growth
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 for both
body
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 and
bone
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 size and a fusion between emphasis. 15 million
years
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piror
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prior
 to
this
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 day. Horses
has
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have
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a
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apply
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dramatic changes in terms of development and evolution, with a significant reduction in
bone
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 numbers and elongation of their limbs. Nowadays, horses become mature with
a
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apply
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full growth in their
body
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 structure and a more defined shape.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, body, bone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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