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Writing Samples
Band 1

A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercises and avoids stress. What should people do to stay healthy in your country?

To begin
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 with, in different locations to be
healthy
Correct article usage
a healthy
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 person you have to
eating
Wrong verb form
eat
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 healthy food and do exercise. In my opinion, I'm living in Saudi Arabia and it's
herder
Use the right word
harder
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 to do exercise outside because
the
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of the
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 weather. Because
that
Correct determiner usage
the
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 government do " line sports " to
become
Verb problem
make it
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 easier to do exercise in the summer ,
such
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 as running or walking .
On the other hand
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, to become
healthier
Punctuation problem
healthier,
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 you should change your mind and see
from
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things from
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 other
views
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perspectives
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.
at
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At
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 first , you make sure to have at least time on screens. and clear your mind or do your favourite hobbies.
However
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 ,
If
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if
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 you have
unhealth
Use the right word
unhealthy
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habits
Punctuation problem
habits,
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 you must change
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
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.
or
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Or
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alarm
Correct article usage
an alarm
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change
Correct subject-verb agreement
changes
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 your daily routine.
To conclude
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, I believe
to be
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that being
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healthy
Correct article usage
a healthy
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 person
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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is not just about what
are
Verb problem
apply
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you do
and
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but
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also
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 about how you
are
Verb problem
apply
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think .

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task
Give clear steps that people can take to stay healthy in your country. Name concrete actions and say how they help.
coherence
Make the flow clear. Use one idea per line and link ideas with 'first', 'next', 'then', 'finally' to guide the reader.
grammar
Check form and spelling. Use correct verb forms and fix common mistakes like 'herder' to 'harder', 'unhealth' to 'unhealthy', and 'habits'.
content
The essay tries to answer the task and mentions stay health in Saudi Arabia.
structure
There is an attempt to show a plan with 'To begin with' and 'To conclude'.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • balanced diet
  • nutrients
  • lean proteins
  • moderate activity
  • mental well-being
  • stress reduction
  • hydration
  • sleep hygiene
  • harmful habits
  • health check-ups
  • health education
  • local produce
  • seasonal produce
  • carbon footprint
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