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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

“In today’s world many people own a smart phone. Do you think the advantages of owning a smartphone outweigh the disadvantages?”

In recent
years
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years,
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 smartphones
are
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have become
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 very important in our
life
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lives
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 because we can
use
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it
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them
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in
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for
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 a lot of things which help us. It does not matter if you are old or young. I believe there are advantages and disadvantages
and
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, and
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i
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I
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 will show
it
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them
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. First of all, smartphones and technology make our life easier
especially
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, especially
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 in education
like
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, like
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 in Covid-19
when
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, when
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 the schools and universities
stopped
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stopped,
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 we moved to
use
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 technology tools to continue
study
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studying
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 and achieve our goals
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. Also
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also
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also,
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 we can shop online and order
what ever
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whatever
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 we want.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 if we communicate by it, it’s very simple and smooth. On
other
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the other
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 hand, some students
also
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people
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 are
addicted
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also addicted
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 to
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use
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using
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 it every time
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, what
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what
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which
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 may
effect
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affect
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in
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apply
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their lives and scores in university or school. Some
people
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posts
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post
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 rumours to be famous
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for
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, for
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 example. What is
more
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more,
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 some
people
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 think about popular
people
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 and how
lives
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their lives
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looks
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look
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 like and start comparing with them
which
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, which
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 is bad.
To sum up
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, smartphones have
tow
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two
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 sides we must be
carful
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careful
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 with
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use
Wrong verb form
using
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it
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them
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. We can get benefits and
harmful
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harm
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 from it. But in the end it
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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advantages more
Correct word order
more advantages
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 than disadvantages.

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structure
Plan your answer first. Write an intro, two body parts, then a short end.
development
In each body part, give one main idea and add one example or detail.
language
Check grammar and spelling. Fix common mistakes and make the words fit.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas connect, and to show contrast and addition.
content
The essay shows both good and bad sides of smartphones.
content
It gives real examples like learning in Covid time and online shopping.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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