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The graph bellow shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014./ Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph bellow shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014./ Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph above illustrates an average change in the
cost
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 of three metals on
monthly
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a monthly
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 basis in the year 2014. The price of nickel shows the maximum fluctuation, throughout the year
with
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 it peaking in the month of
january
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January
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 at 6% .The price remains constant from
march
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March
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 to
may
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May
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 at
1%s
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1%
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,
howing
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showing
 a sharp dip after that by dropping down to -3%. The price moderately
rise
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rose
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 in
july
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July
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 to -1%, before again dipping down to -2% in
october
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October
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. We see a moderate increase to 1% in
november
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November
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 and
december
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December
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. The
cost
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 of zinc rises from 1% in
january
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January
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 to 3% in
february
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February
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 before constantly decreasing
down
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to 1% again in May, with it touching the lowest in
june
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June
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 to -1%. The value remains constant until
september
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September
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 with little above -1%,
whereas
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october
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October
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 again see the lowest at -1%, before rising in
november
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November
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 and
december
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December
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 to 2%. Copper shows moderate change with its value between -1% and 2%. The maximum value of copper can be seen in
january
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January
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 at 2% with
this
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 gradually decreasing down to a little more than 0% until April. The
cost
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 falls below 0% in
may
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May
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 and
june
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June
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, before rising to 1% throughout
july
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July
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 to
september
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September
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. October and
november
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November
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sees
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see
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 the
cost
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 between 0-1% with
december
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December
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 experiencing a rise to 1.5%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderately" was used 3 times.
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