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Write an letter to your friend telling telling them you have moved to a new city State the reason for the move Describe Describe the city and accommodation And invite your friend

Dear Mary, How are you ? I wanted to let you know that I have relocated from Lincoln to a new city .
Last
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 month, I moved from Lincoln to
London
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 because of
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 job opportunity I got in
London
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 .It is a data analyst position which pays better than my previous job. It
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 provides me with the chance to expand my career because
London
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 is the key to the IT industry in the United Kingdom Now , let me give you an insight into my new home or town ,
London
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 is the centre of the United Kingdom. It has a lot of business opportunities for different people around the world. It
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 has
a
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beautiful scenery which
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I wish you could see
it
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. A clear example
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is the beautiful cathedral at the
center
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centre
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 of the city
which
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 displays different lights every night. It is a sight to behold. I love the accommodation in
London
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. It is not expensive, when compared to Lincoln
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 anyone can afford it .
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, my house is very spacious and big with an incredible view of the sea at a very nice price . With
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 price, I am able to save some money for the future
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 , I want to invite you to
London
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 next week for a festival. It will be a great experience for you , and you can use
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 opportunity to stay with me for a few days.
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, I will use
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 opportunity to show you the beautiful scenery in the city. I really hope you can honour my invitation. Love, Kunbi

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plan
Put one idea in each part. Start with why you moved, then talk about the city, then about your home.
grammar
Fix small errors in grammar and marks. Use comma and full stop well and no space before them.
vocabulary
Use plain and short words. Some long words make it hard to read.
facts
Be true to facts. If you say you see the sea from your home, say how and where.
tone
Keep a warm tone. End with kind words.
content
Clear plan of move and invite.
tone
Friendly feel in the writing.
content
Gives many details about work and life.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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