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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree

For some
people
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, clean
water
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 is
necesary
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necessary
 to human beings.
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 the costs should be paid by the government.As for me, I disagree with it. I think
people
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 should pay
despite
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apply
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only for the tax fee. The reason why I disagree with it is the costs and the value of the
water
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 resources. The infrastructure system established by
government
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the government
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 is really costly not only for building it, but
also
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the
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for the
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 maintenance. I believe that clean
water
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 is good for
people
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 to make
a
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apply
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great
development
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progress
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 in the quality of life, but we should
also
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 keep
pay
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and cost
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cost and
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balance
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pay
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. The
water
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 resources on the earth are not unlimited
,
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;
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 most of the
water
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 on the earth is unusable,
such
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 as the salt
water
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, the glacier... .The usage of the
water
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 we can use for fresh
water
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 is more lacking than we thought. In my opinion, the problem of the
water
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 shortage does exist, and that the problem humans should face it.
Instead
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 of taking it for granted, clean
water
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 should be paid
in
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for in
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 order to save
water
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 for the basic needs. In conclusion, I think the payment for the clean
water
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 is
neccesary
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necessary
. The usage of the
water
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 depends on how the way
people
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 use it.
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Therefore
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 I think it is fair for each person to pay
the
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 usage of
water
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 of themselves.

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task response
State your view in the first line and keep it clear. Stay with that view in all points.
structure
Use 3 short paragraphs: intro with your view, one or two reasons, and a short conclusion.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, and because. Make a clear flow from one idea to the next.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Use easy words and short sentences.
content
The writer has a clear view and tries to show reason for the view.
content
Some ideas on cost and water supply are used.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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