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One of your friends has asked you to be a partner in his/her new business. Write a letter to reply to your friend's offer. In your letter, • give your opinion of your friend's business idea • tell him/her whether or not you have decided to accept the offer • and explain your reasons for this deci

Dear Ashish Hello. Hope
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 letter finds you well. I got your letter about you want to start your new firm. My judgement says that I
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agree with your plan to open a tuition
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 as you know better
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there is
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any
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 other superior coaching centre in our locality.
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,
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you
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have
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 two years
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 as a teacher.
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, I am working
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in
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 the Lorpon
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 company. I have no time to pay attention to other
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that
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 would be a lot for me. Unfortunately, I refuse your proposal. I
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 for that
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 maybe
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 Next week I
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can come
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 and stay with you
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help you
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make a plan how
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 the educational centre. Thanks and regards Shabnam

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grammar
Fix the grammar in key lines. For example, say 'I agree with your plan' not 'I am agree'.
content
Be clear on your decision first. Do not mix 'agree' and 'refuse' in the same part.
structure
Split ideas into short par a. Each idea in one para.
lexis
Use easy words. Try 'area' or 'place in town' instead of hard words.
tone
Keep the tone polite and friendly. It fits a letter to a friend.
format
End with a clear note of next steps.
tone
You open with a kind note and greet your friend.
content
You say sorry and offer to help later.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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