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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comprasions where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comprasions where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates information about how group in one nation spent their weekly income in two different years.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that food was the highest consumed by people.
In addition
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, leisure was the highest spending by households.
Whereas
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, fuel and power were the lowest spending by families in the week.
According to
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 what is shown, food in 1968 was the highest consumed , nearly 35% of weekly income.
Whereas
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, leisure in 2018 was the highest spending by the families, just below 25% of weekly income. In terms of fuel and power , in 1986, the lowest spent by the tribe in the week just over 5% of their weekly cash.
Whereas
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, in 2018, personal goods were the lowest spent by the clan in the week , nearly 5% of weekly earnings.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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