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Some people think that the best way to become successful in life is to get a university education, whereas others say this is no longer true. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In today's world, to become successful with
this
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 ear
have
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has
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different
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a different
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 way. In my opinion, to become
success
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successful
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 in your life you have to know
what's
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what
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 your dream
.
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is.
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 Some
people
Use synonyms
 have different perspectives,
for example
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,
there's
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there are
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people
Use synonyms
always
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who always
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dreaming
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dream
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to be
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of being
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Correct article usage
a doctore
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doctore
Correct your spelling
doctor
.
and
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And
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 you can't become
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a doctore
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doctore
Correct your spelling
doctor
 without studying at university.
when
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When
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 other
people
Use synonyms
 have dreams ,
Such
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 as
have
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having
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company
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a company
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 or
be
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being
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influencer
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an influencer
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 on social media.
Moreover
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,
there's
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there are
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 normal
people
Use synonyms
 in online open their
brands
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own brands
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 and become successful .
While
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other's
Use the right word
others
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 open their YouTube channel and
travelling
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travel
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 around the world.
To conclude
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,
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apply
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. Is not about what others
think
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think,
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it is
Use the right word
it's
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 about what
are
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apply
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you really want .

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task
Make a plan before you write. Say your view in the first line. Then give 2 or 3 ideas with short proof or example. Finish with a short end.
coherence
Use linking words to move ideas. Use words like first, next, but, also, and then, yet to join ideas so they flow.
content
The essay shows two sides on a topic and a clear wish to give your view.
content
There are ideas about dream, work, and life goal.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • university degree
  • specialized knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • networking opportunities
  • vocational training
  • self-made entrepreneurs
  • gig economy
  • online courses
  • certifications
  • formal education
  • practical experience
  • lifelong learning
  • career goals
  • individual circumstances
  • academic qualifications
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