Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters hat affect them. Discuss both and give your own opinion.

Nowadays,

children

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thend

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tend

to rely on their parents or others rather than stand alone.

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leads them to be unable to think individually after being an adult in the future.

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, setting the mindset by their own selves is quite important to them, which can be developed only in

teenage

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their teenage

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years.

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Even if problems

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are so

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smail

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small

or not, the way gives them a wisdom

foward

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forward

to a life.

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, I think

importance

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the importance

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of decisions made by themselves is closely connected with the first option. Both of them

are required

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similar skills from

children

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. To be more specific, choosing something in their daily life could be hard in view of

children

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, because they are still

struggled

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with

controling

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controlling

a desire.

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, most

children

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consider which one they will take among the options in any subject. If there was a child who

want

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toys and

candys

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candies

both of them.

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, parents gave limits

that

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apply

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she could pick either of them.

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, she would think deeply

what

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about what

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can make me happier

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. I believe they can learn a lot of things in

process

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Task response

Plan before you write. Start with a short intro that name both views and your clear view. End with a short closing line that restates your view.

Coherence and cohesion

Make each paragraph have a main idea. Use simple links like first, also, but, then to show how ideas go from one to another.

Coherence and cohesion

Give one clear example for each idea and explain why it shows your point. Keep examples short.

Content

You show both views and you give your view.

Examples

You use an easy example about choosing toy and candy.

Opinion

You try to say why deciding by self is important.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

181 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays the diferent between countries are becoming less evident because people follow the same media. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages.