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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
The graph illustrates the
consumption
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 of fish and some different kinds of meat in total between 1979 and 2004 in a European country.
Overall
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, the
consumption
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 of
beef
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 and
chicken
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 was the
hightest
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highest
 in 1979 and 2004 .
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, the
consumption
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 of fish was the lowest throughout the years. In 1979,
beef
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consumption
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was
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stood at around 220
grams
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 per person per week,
while
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chicken
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was
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consumption
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 decreased to approximately 150
grams
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.
However
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,
chicken
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consumption
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 increased steadily over the years and overtook
beef
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 at around 200
grams
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 in the late 1980s. After that,
chicken
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 continued to rise and reached a peak of about 250
grams
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 in 2004.
By contrast
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, both
beef
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 and lamb showed a downward trend.
Beef
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 fluctuated slightly
in
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at
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 the beginning of
years
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the year
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 before falling to around 110
grams
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 in 2004.
Moreover
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, lamb
consumption
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 decreased from approximately 150
grams
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 in 1979 to about 70
grams
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at the end
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 of the period. Meanwhile, fish
consumption
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 remained stable
about
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at about
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 50
grams
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in
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over
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 the period of time.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, beef, chicken, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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