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Some people think history tells little or nothing, whereas others believe it makes us know the present. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Undoubtedly, with time progressing, human activities have been recorded and documented for a long period of time to form
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Whereas
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 some
people
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 look upon the existence of
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 as an indicator to connect the past and the present, others refer to
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 as something meaningless to know the past. As for my perspective, I am in
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 of the former, and the reasons will be elaborated on thoroughly as follows. An array of causes may lead to why
history
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 seems to be rather useless to
this
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 contemporary society.
To begin
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 with,
due to
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 different backgrounds, ancient
history
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 cannot be totally and directly applied to
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 modern era.
For example
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, our ancestors used to adopt
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 to warm, cook and fight against others;
however
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,
this
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 application does not exert the same value
to
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 the present
days
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 since modern
people
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 tend to mainly make use of electricity at home or anywhere they prefer, so the learning may be too distant between these two different periods.
Secondly
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, most
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 has been written by historians with subjective perspectives, so the authenticity of
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 ought to be doubted.
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, the validity of
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 may suffer from the manipulation of authority, containing certain grounds, leading to little value to be trusted.
On the other hand
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, as far as I am concerned, learning
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 may truly bring more benefits to individuals and societies.
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, previous mistakes can be learned to be the foundation of the present since most
people
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 may learn a lesson from what they have been wrong. Based on a study conducted by National Taiwan University, in 2020, the Taiwan government successfully
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 the attack of Covid-19 and reduced the case rate to 50% lower than other surrounding countries since we had learned lessons from SARS 18 years ago.
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,
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 can be acquired from the past to link to the learning of cultures and origins; through
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, more customs and practices can be illustrated clearly and reasonably. To put it another way, more modern
people
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 cannot understand much regarding why certain cultures may turn in
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 way, but going back to
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, more answers can be offered to those knotty questions. In conclusion, based on the aforementioned, I am firmly convinced that learning
history
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 can genuinely usher in more merits
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 the fact that more mistakes can be avoided and more cultures
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 well as
origins
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origins,
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 can be explained.

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coherence
Make the intro and end clear. Say your view at the start and finish with a short reason.
coherence
Use short and clear links between ideas in each paragraph, like also, for example, but also, on the other hand.
task
Give one or two simple points for each side and give a clear, small example for each.
grammar
Check grammar and small errors. Use short, easy sentences.
lexical
Use plain words. Stay on topic and avoid hard or long words.
overall
Clear view on the topic is shown.
task
The essay discusses both sides and gives a view.
structure
Intro and conclusion exist.
coherence
Link words help flow of ideas.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • insights
  • progression
  • values
  • beliefs
  • heritage
  • identity
  • applicable
  • biased
  • subjective
  • practical
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