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The graph below shows that the percentage of Australian export to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The graph below shows that the percentage of Australian export to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
The bar chart gives information about the proportion the
export
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exports
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 from Australia to
Japan
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,
US
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the US
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, China and India between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
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, the export to
Japan
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 was
high
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a high
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 proportion,
while
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 to India was
low
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a low
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 proportion over the period. Turning to the details,
Japan
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 accounted for around 25% as the highest among the 4 countries in 1990.
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The
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the
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figure
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 went down steadily,
Japan
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 was
the
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in the
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 highest position until 2005 with about 18%.
US
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The US
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 was the
second highest
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second-highest
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 importing country from Australia in
1990
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1990,
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 with 11%. The
figure
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 fluctuated
and
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apply
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through
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throughout
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 the period, and in 2012, fell to 7%. China was just around 3% in 1990
,
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however
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however,
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 the
figure
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 soared significantly and
took
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reached its
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 highest position since 2007, and reached
to
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apply
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28% in 2012. India was the lowest importing country from Australia with 1% in 1990 and stayed at the
figure
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to
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until
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 2000. Since 2000, the
figure
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 rose to 2010 and reached 7%, but the
figure
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 decreased to2012 in 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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