People spend more and more time browsing social networks. Is it a positive or negative development? Should anything be done to restrict children’s access to social networks? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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world,
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are more
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social
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regarding
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both their remote work
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online social interaction with others, and it is undeniable that it breaks the geographic
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boundaries
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the limitations to
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knowledge from different social contexts. Despite the merits, browsing social
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indeed
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people
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's attention on real-life situations to some extent.
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, it enables
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to neglect the significance of capturing the real-life moments and social interactions with their families, friends and peers.
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, over-immersing
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social
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can
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a huge impact on
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's development and growth both mentally and physically negatively.
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my standpoint, it creates more negative developments
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than
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positive ones. To be more elaborated, social
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provide various platforms to facilitated
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to speak up more freely and sparkle more ideas by sharing and exchanging opinions with one another,
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people
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would even go for some social
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like Instagram or TikTok to kill time
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feeling free, even some online shopping applications like Ebay, Alibaba etc. would provide
people
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with chances to buy what they like without stepping outside of their accommodatoins. Even
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though social
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networks
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play vital roles in our social domains and have gradually become
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inseparable
parts of our daily lives, we still have to acknowledge that
people
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tend to be more careless about what happens around us in the real-life world.
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, what they are pursuing more is the intangible praise or instant satisfaction on
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the internet
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. Some social
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have
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criticised
that a huge group of
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spend excessive time
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taking selfies rather than enjoying the breathtaking sceneries and embracing
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nature or appreciating the historic handcrafts
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because they only care about whether their pictures are stunning or perfect
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enough
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social
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and allow them to gain more compliments.
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, it is risky to be
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to social
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especially
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, especially
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for
children
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who are at their early
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. At
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point, adolescents are not mature enough mentally to distinguish right from wrong
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;
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all the information and things they might touch upon are relatively under-surveillance,
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and it
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might be too overwhelming for them to gain
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messages mixed with good and bad.
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,
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children
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smaller ones, are good at imitating
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they perceive, and the online information could definitely shape their mental growth to some extent. Access
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devastating
input would undoubtedly generate demotivation among
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and shape their vision of the world. Under
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, some precautions should be adopted to avoid
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consequences. To start with, guardians should take the responsibility of parenting
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and make sure the majority of input they access
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under surveillance.
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, it might be more feasible if the time kids spend on
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cell phones
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is limited.
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example,
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in China, in elementary schools and
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schools,
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cell phones
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are totally forbidden to use in
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contexts. It will effectively and efficiently restrict
children
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’s usage of social
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.
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, it cannot be deniable that social
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has contributed a lot
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our society as a versatile tool
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, but
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it is not completely flawless. As
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grown-up
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grown-ups
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, we have to keep in mind that we can adopt the tools but cannot be manipulated by
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.
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, it will definitely become problematic in
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society.

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task
In the intro, state your view clearly in one line.
task
Give two clear reasons and a solid example for each.
coherence
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coherence
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language
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content
The essay shows a clear view on the topic and uses real examples.
structure
Some use of linking words and transitions.

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