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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You have just returned from holiday and were not satisfied with your trip. Write to the travel agency. In your letter •Say where / when you went on holiday •Explain why you are not satisfied with your holiday •Tell them what you would like them to do You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Dear sir/madam I am writing
this
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 letter to let you know about my dissatisfaction with my
last
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 holiday trip. I booked
ticket
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a ticket
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 via your travel agency to London on 17th September 2025 . There are numerous reasons behind my not up to the mark travel experience. First and foremost is accommodation. It was very congested and not properly lit.
Moreover
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, food services are not always on time
with
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, with
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 no complementary drinks, which were already included in the package.
Secondly
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, I
also
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 paid for a taxi from the airport to the hotel in advance
,
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;
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however
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, no one showed up there. Unfortunately,
i
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I
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 had to pay those fares out of my pocket.
Finally
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, your company did not mention about allergy problem
while
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 selecting food items for the flight. Later on, I
also
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 faced some allergic issues like itching and redness. I just want you to
double check
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double-check
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 all the things , whether accommodation, food and other services , in advance with the hotel.
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, no one will suffer and pay additional money. Yours faithfully, Raman

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Task Response
Your letter shows the main points: where/when you went, why you are unhappy, and what you want. Make each part clear and put in separate paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
Link ideas in a clear order. Use small, simple links to show flow. Try one idea per paragraph and end with a clear request.
Strength
The letter shows the purpose to tell about problems.
Strength
It uses a polite closing.
Strength
It gives some details like taxi issue and allergy issue.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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