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The diagrams below show the changes of a town called Bridgetown in 1700 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the changes of a town called Bridgetown in 1700 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps compare Bridgetown at one point in time with its layout in 1700.
Overall
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, the area shifts from agriculture to living, with new facilities added and the
road
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 network extended,
while
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 key natural features
such
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 as the river and woods are retained. In 1700, a castle occupied the northern
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 woods arranged around it. A river
lied
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 to the northeast, and access was provided by one
road
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. Services for residents are limited, and there
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 little mixed use. By 2000, the castle was removed and replaced by a school. A new bypass connected the
road
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 crossing the river, improving circulation across the site. The areas that were between the main
road
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 and the bypass were built up. The railway line was constructed beside the main
road
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.
In addition
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, the
market place
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 was extended to woods.
However
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, the farmland was limited.
As a result
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, the district became mainly residential with better access and a broader range of services for daily life.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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