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Band 6.5

You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • exain the important event • apolgise for the situation • suggest a new arrangment

Dear Simran, I hope
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 letter finds you healthy.I am writing
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 letter to let you know about the recent changes in my flight date,
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 my job
interview
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 I always discuss my future goals with you.
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, I was putting so much effort into getting my dream job for the past few years.Fortunately, I received a response from my dream company and they are going to conduct my
interview
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 ,in the same week, I was planning to come to your space.
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 to
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, I spoke with the
interview
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 team to reschedule my
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 unfortunately , they don't have other slots. I really want to apologise for these sudden changes . I talked with the travel agency to book my flight on another day. Luckily, I got a date ,just next to the
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 date.
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, there will be a difference of 2-3 days . Hope you understand my situation. Yours lovingly, Raman

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improvement
Explain the event clearly and link it to the plan change. State the new date simply.
structure
Use shorter sentences. Break long sentences into parts.
tone
Make sure the greeting and closing fit a friend letter. Keep the tone friendly.
tone
Friendly tone that fits a letter to a friend.
content
The letter mentions all required parts: event, apology, and new plan.
presentation
Opening and closing are present and clear.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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