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Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion.

Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion.
The two pie charts illustrate the percentage of
how
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apply
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American people travelling to a particular university in 2004 and 2009.
Overall
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, a glance at the graphs provided reveals
all
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that all
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transportations
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transportation
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 experienced a major shift in
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usage except the
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 car method.
Train
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The train
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 was the lowest
popularity
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in popularity
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between
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among
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 people over the decade. In 2004, travelling by car accounted for the largest sector at just over half of the total (51%),
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followed
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 by bus at 33%. Walking and train
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show
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 a relatively similar share at 4% and 3% respectively.
Whereas
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, bicycle share 9% of the total.
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, in 2009,
bus
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the bus
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 method rose dramatically to make up 46%, overtaking car transport, which dropped sharply to only 28%. The number of individuals who are working increased by 2% to almost 6%,
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 the
used
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 of
train
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trains
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 witnessed negligible growth by 1% to become 4%, the lowest method throughout the period.
According to
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bicycle
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the bicycle
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 reaching
to
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16%.

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