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Band 4.5

With recent developments in technology like e-books, some people feel that printed media like books, newspapers, and magazines will soon be a thing of the past. Others feel that these forms of media will never disappear. What is your opinion ? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In
this
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 contemporary scenario, reading
habit
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habits
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has been
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have
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 changed entirely
,
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;
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 there are
few
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a few
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 people who prefer reading with
traditional
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the traditional
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 method
than
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over
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 the modern
.
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one.
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Therefore
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, some people believe that paper-based
media
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would be
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will
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vanished
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vanish
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 in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 years.
While
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,
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apply
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 others argue that printed
media
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 cannot fade away, it will be
same
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the same
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 as it is. I personally think
,
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apply
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 non-digital
media
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 still have
the
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apply
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equal value and it
would
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will
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 be in the future too. So,
this
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would
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will
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 discuss my point of view with examples.
Although
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 online reading could be convenient as everyone
carry
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carries
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cell
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a cell
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 phone and
read
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reads
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 on the internet, printed publication has its own importance because it promotes
the
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apply
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authenicity
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authenticity
, often resulting
not
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in not
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 only accurate but
also
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 verified
information
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.
In other words
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, before printing any news or
information
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 in newspapers or in books
respectively
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, respectively
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, it passed through various steps to verify the data via government and
jourinlism
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journalism
.
Thus
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,
its
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it
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increase
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increases
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 the
realiablity
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reliability
 and
reduce
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reduces
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 the chances of
rumeros
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rumours
.
For example
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,
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the
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author
collect
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collects
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 the data through conducting interviews, live
on ground
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on-ground
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 reporting,
then
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send
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sends
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 the
information
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 to the editors for editing and proofreading,
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finally
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and finally
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transfer
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transfers
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 it to the
publicors
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public
 for printing.
That is
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 why
,
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apply
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 there
is
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are
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 always
few
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a few
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 chances of misleading
information
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 in
printing
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the printing
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media
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.
Furthermore
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,
the
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apply
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another
most
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apply
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important advantage is that it is
easy
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easier
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 to concentrate
while
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 reading hard copy
media
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 than e-books. To explain it, during reading
information
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 digitally, readers may
distract
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be distracted
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 by unnecessary advertisements or promotional videos
which
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, which
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 is impossible in the case of reading offline by books
and
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, and
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reader
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the reader
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 can easily focus on
data
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the data
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.
Along with
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this
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, online reading may create numerous health
issue
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issues
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such
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 as
,
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apply
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 poor
eye-sights
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eyesight
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 and
headache
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headaches
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. To
examplify
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exemplify
 it,
computer
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a computer
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 or phone screen emits blue light, so readers look at
screen
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the screen
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 for long
period
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periods
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 without
break
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a break
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, and tend to blink less when reading digitally.
As a result
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, ones suffer from
eyes
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eye
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 disorders like
,
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apply
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irriration
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irritation
, dry or watery eye, headache, and poor vision. In conclusion, despite the benefits of reading on screen,
i
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I
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 internally believe that the traditional way of reading by printed copies would be equally
reputed
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reputable
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 as digital books. Since
,
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apply
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 it is
healthy
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a healthy
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,
concentrative
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concentrated
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 and trustworthy medium.

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task response
State your view clearly in the first line and keep the same idea in all parts. Give two or three clear reasons with a short example for each.
coherence
Make a new paragraph for each big idea. Use linking words like also, but, and, for example to connect ideas.
strength
The essay shows a clear topic about printed vs digital media.
strength
It gives some reasons and examples to back the view.
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